Neon Genesis: Angel 3: Redemption
By Slayer
Genres: Crossover, Alternate Universe

Comment 1. January 29, 2007 | Posted By:
Not bad. There is a bit in the last chapter that gave me pause, however.

The Japanese soldiers attacking NERV had no idea about SEELE. As far as any of them knew, their orders came from the Japanese government. Even the commanding officers in overall charge of the operation wouldn't have been told anything else except maybe that the Ministry of the Interior ordered the attack because of "a grave danger."

And certainly someone with the rank of captain (this would be a company commander, incidentally, in charge of three or four platoons totaling 100-150 men) wouldn't even have been told that much. He'd just have been given the orders by by his own commanding officer with no information beyond what he immediately needed to know.

SEELE was a secret society, remember. Only a few even knew they existed.
Comment 2. November 29, 2006 | Posted By:
Actually, it just occurred to me that they may have deliberately inverted the naming scheme for Kaji to reflect his triple agent status. He's playing all sides against the middle and is constantly subverting our perceptions of the Eva universe and himself. Somethng to ponder, eh? ;-)
Comment 3. November 29, 2006 | Posted By:
Wow, I didn't know that they were all names of military ships from WWII, major kudos to you=) That being said, "Ryouji" (or 'Ryoji') is clearly given as his first name on wikipedia, on the English translation of Gainax's official website, in my copies of the Neon Genesis Evangelion Manga, and on the screen shot from episode 21 where they do a close up of the card. (Yes, me a geek ;) The battleship connection is cool, and its awsome that you spotted it (I didn't) but that doesn't change how the company officially transcribed the name.
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ryouji_Kaji
[url=http://translate.google.com/translate?hl=en&sl=ja&u=http://www.gainax.co.jp/top.html&sa=X&oi=translate&resnum=1&ct=result&prev=/search%3Fq%3Dhttp://www.gainax.co.jp/top.html%26hl%3Den%26lr%3D%26sa%3DG]Gainax.net (Translated Via Google)

The latest installments are great and I hope you keep up the amazing work, Harry Potter and the Demonic Fate is a fun twist, and Mana's a great character.
Comment 4. November 10, 2006 | Posted By:
Heya Slayer :bows: nice going with this latest book o the saga... im thinking im gonna like the way it turns out... but anway, cheers for all the tales, please keep them coming ^^
Comment 5. November 6, 2006 | Posted By:
Sorry, I meant it does NOT overwhelm the story, it's just really annoying. =P
Comment 6. November 6, 2006 | Posted By:
Hi.
I've really enjoyed your stories, and they're of much better quality than one usually finds in fanfiction. That being said, you seem to have a running mistake with Kaji's name. 'Ryoji' is his first name, it's just that everyone refers to him by his last name, 'Kaji'. You have some great material here but little, continous mistakes like this act like the mosquito buzzing in the background; it does overwhelm the story but it is annoying.
Best wishes.

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