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Father
By Lord Talon
Genres: Romance, Angst

Comment 1. August 14, 2008 | Posted By:
  This is an awesome fanfiction. One of the best, I think. lol
  I enjoy Shinji's change as he takes on such responsibility, though I felt, at first, like Asuka was too OoC, as I read more it felt better, and I like how you keep having her fire show through.
  Shinji is a character I can partly identify with, as I have never really had many friends, and I can identify with him more in your story because I feel the same loyalty to my lady as you have him show here towards Asuka.
  I enjoy how Rei has gotten emotions, and perhaps a boyfriend. lol. Rei is one of my favorite characters from the series, and I like it when authors of Fanfics keep her in the story, especially as Shinji's sister. I also like that she and Asuka are starting to be good friends.
  I also like how you've gotten Misato off beer, funny though that may have been, and gave more background to her and Kaji's past relationship. Hope they get wed in one of the up-coming chapters! lol
  Keep going strong, I'll be waiting for more. Good luck with the real world too. ;)
Comment 2. June 1, 2008 | Posted By: XRaiderV1
wow, I must say, quite the attention grabbing read.
been reading this story since last night, and I only just finished it, and I enjoyed every word.
I look forward to future installments.
Comment 3. January 26, 2008 | Posted By:
wonderful, i loved the way you did Gendo, it was one of the best depictions of him i'v ever seen. i also loved the way shinji changed when he took on the responsibility of fatherhood. my only complaint is that you could have made it more obvious that they're older at the beginning, i found it rather disconcerting until you mentioned them being 16
Comment 4. September 10, 2007 | Posted By:
please explain the extreme OOC

otherwise was nice
Comment 5. July 19, 2007 | Posted By: LD
I do enjoy this story you are writing man. It has all my favorite aspects of the classic waff masters back in the days when I first started out in this fandom.

Seems the formatting on somethings didn't quite take though. You should double check the file as HTML then load it here again.

LD

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